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JunminChen
Professor Vance
Engl 102
17 Nov 2009
Since I started to write, every teacher taught me every good paper came from many times revising. However, I never put this in my mind. Not because I do not agree with it, but it is because even though I read my paper again and again, I still could not find out what should I revise. So, at last, I gave up. I can say, not just me, revising is many writers’ big challenge. And I found that in this “Revising for purpose” which was written by Ballenger, she gave us the answer that why revising is so hard. Just as the love story she used in the beginning, the first draft has a very different relationship with us so that even though we know that it has some imperfect places, we still do not want to change it. And also, I think that everyone would careful to write from the beginning. So, in their minds, every word was thought carefully and every sentence was decorated detailed. Then, when we want to revise it, it makes us hard to give up our first choice.
After I read this paper, I had an idea about how to revise our paper easily. As what Ballenger said, the revising is for purpose, to make the thesis stronger, to make the points tighter to each other, the make the whole paper more completely. So, I thought when we start to revise, maybe we could make a guideline first, then look up your draft again, separate your sub point in the first draft, put them under the match place then add something or subtract something. In this way, to reorganize the whole paper and find out which parts are very important, which parts are necessary, which parts are surplus? In addition to that, I found that when we finished a draft paper, maybe we can put it away then read it again after a few days. You will find that easily to finger out the problems and make some develops in your paper. Over all, revising is not a scare thing. Just use your heart to do it, and then you can feel the exciting on revising.

Reading Response...

As I read through Bruce Balleneger's The Curious Researcher on how to revise a draft to become it's finest, I found that there are many ways you can go about the task. He first starts by saying that the relationship with your paper can't just be because you worked so long and hard on it. You must revise your paper to all make sense and pertain to the main point.
So his next point is that you must follow through with your main point completely through out your paper. He suggests that by writing your thesis to your paper on a notecard to reflect on through out the writing process will help in clarifying the point in your paper.
Another good tactic to use is after your paper is written and ready for revision you can then attack it with your scissors. You cut each paragraph apart and don't worry about organization because you must shuffle them up anyways. Then you can reorganize them how you feel they should now be put in order. This way you can also sort one paragraph at a time, which ones have to do with the thesis on the notecard and which ones don't.
Bruce Ballenger just wants you to be able to take control of your paper by driving the point home with the main idea. He then contradicts himself by saying that you shouldn't over power it either. So not too light and not too heavy but just right.

revising for purpose

Reading Response

Revising has always been my weak point when making my final draft. I know how to fix most grammar and punctuation marks but it is hard for me to fully understand how to make my paper a more complete and interesting piece. After reading these pages on revising by Ballinger, I have come to understand what revising really is and means to us who are revising papers or looking at what someone else has suggested we do for our revision. I feel when I am writing a paper that I am trying to put down as much information or facts that I can make my argument or thesis more creditable or persuasive. Ballenger states that although strong information and facts are good, it is just as important to make your voice easily heard through your writing.
I have seen that my rough drafts for unit 1 and 2 need much work, and from what I have read from others comments on it, is that I need to organize my paper better so my paragraphs transition from one to another more smoothly. Also that omitting things from my paper may actually help it out more. Ballinger also says when revising your papers to look at your thesis and possibly go about changing it or looking at it from a different perspective. This can help you learn more about your topic which will make you more knowledgeable and should allow you have a stronger voice in your writing. In reading “Revising for Purpose” I feel that I will now not only be able to look at my own paper at closer detail but also to look at my fellow classmates papers as well and give them better ideas for revision. Revising is an extremely important characteristic in all aspects of writing and should not be done lightly. Like Ballinger says, revision is for a purpose, to make your writing stronger, more organized, more creative, and overall interesting and fun for your reader.

Reading Response

I never really thought of revising,how Ballenger explains it. I always thought that when someone revised my paper they were fixing punctuation marks, or giving me a hint on how to re word some information. In reality though, I myself revise my paper similar to how Ballenger explains in the reading " Revising for Purpose". Whenever I write a paper, I just let all my ideas flow and after I'm done I tend to rewrite my paper at least three to four times sometimes more, sometimes less. I have to do whatever it takes to make my paper flow even if that means changing the thesis or switching it up. Ballenger encourages us as writers to do that because as we do that we no longer are just stating facts but we show the new information with the old information and it gives our paper a voice. I personally like to show passion in my paper and try and make the reader understand how I feel about what I am writing hoping they can relate to it as well.
Although I will like to think that writing is an easy process most of the time, I have found that it can be a complex process as well. There are times when I really want to state something in my paper but the flow of the paper wouldn't match if I do so therefore I cant. Ballenger says that it is okay if we have to take out things we feel should be there and start all over. What will be even better is if we can rearrange it somehow to make the paper just great. Writing doesn't have to be boring, if your creative enough when you revise your paper you can add a special touch and make it an awesome paper.

Jasmine's Op-ed

The homeless problem has become America’s most ignored white noise that is continually growing each day. White noise is only white noise when the majority chooses to tune out the background issues of lives. The issues who are ever so changing, ever so revolving, day to day events and situations that occur in the individuals life. It all changes when one stops and listens, stops and looks to what is really happening around them. They hear the settle whisper cry, the churn of an empty stomach, they see these people along with their broken hearted dreams fighting for only its mere existence. When you look in their face you can see their eyes crying out for help. They urge to hope but they are limited because they can’t expect much from society’s actions.

What is happening to our world now? Before the only places we use to experience homelessness was in big populated cities but now it seems as if they are everywhere even in our state of residence, Idaho. It never fails to amaze me on how many people aren’t aware of this growing problem and those who are most of the time choose not to do much to change this. According to Rebecca Boone, from the Associated Press, on any given night there is between 2,000 and 4,500 people who are homeless in the city of Boise and only about 700 of them will be able to get a bed or mat in one of the area’s shelter. So what happens to the rest of them? You guessed it they have no other choice but to find a way to survive and at times this means breaking the law or doing what they have to do to stay alive another night.

Society’s neglect is embalming and magnifying the problem and has depleted hope out of most. Homelessness is becoming a routine and just another lifestyle. More and more people have accepted the thought of being homeless and don’t see any change in their future. Who are we to blame them? We have no idea what they have gone through or what they are going through. You might say just like everyone else says what about them going to a shelter? You will be shocked when you hear these homeless individuals saying they refuse to go to a shelter not because they are prideful, but according to my friend Duke, who is a victim of homelessness shelters because they could care less about them. “ They provide us with somewhere to sleep and a pb& J sandwich but that is about it, I need some resources and ideas on how I can find a job and get me and my wife and kids out of the streets” Duke said.

What brings an agency to such a crooked operation? Could it be that it is starting off of immoral bound. Something went terribly from its first intentions to its present day status. A status that, according to the US constitution and the imagery of the American dream, should be unknown. Not applicable. Unfound. No definition. Unheard of. Luckily it is not late, together we can make a difference and prevent and eliminate homelessness. If the people around us aren’t doing enough then we will.

Tattoo Trends Arise OP-ED

Tattoos have been spiritual and religious for ages, and with the banning of them as Christianity arose during the ancient Roman Empire, they have just recently taken a stand once more. But the idea of an un-clean body has ruined the spirituality of tattooing for many Christians and Muslims alike. Nan McNab in the book Body Bizarre Body Beautiful, talks about how, “People are supposed to be made in God’s image, and they didn’t want mere mortals adding graffiti [to them].” The Christian Church has always set a negative view on tattoos and for years tattoos have always meant gang relation, jail time, or plain old rebel. But with recent popularity and a new way to express your self through this art form it has been opened up to the general public. Clinton R. Sanders from his book “Customizing The Body” concurs that “the most important change has been the transformation of tattooing from the ostensibly ‘deviant’ practice…to the popular cultural phenomenon it is today.” From young college girls to beefy biker dudes flaunting their ink, whether it be fairies or nakey chicks, it all represents the person who wears it.
Ashley Bradley, my sister, and advice go-to, shared with me the other day about her thoughts on tattoos that she has yet to try out. She states, “Tattoos are personal memorials that represent your own life journey.” The young, spry, girl sitting next to you at Baskin Robins bearing a flower tattoo upon her left foot could share the same design as the older woman in the car next to you in traffic but they each have one of a kind stories and emotional connections to the similar ink patterns on their bodies. “And that’s what tattoos are all about; the experience, the emotional connection and the commitment, which are all the ingredients of a healthy spiritual life”, she concluded. It’s not a matter of good vs. evil but a matter of the voyage you take in life.
So with this new idea in, Christians around are struggling with the good vs. evil aspect of tattooing. This recent fad is practically against anything the Christians stand for and more Christians seem to be branching out to get tattooed, me being an example. As I rummaged through the bible I could only really back up the idea that God created our bodies and they are temples that we must care for. I understand reasoning on not supporting tattoos in the devil’s favor, but I struggle with the fact that a tattoo can take away from the people we truly are. They may change our physical appearance but they don’t change our hearts or the Lord’s so it’s hard for me to believe that a beautiful piece of artwork strewn across your body could affect your religious beliefs in such a fashion as she discussed.
Once you look past the restrictions churches hold upon our society, you will see the great freedom there is within this form of expression. But you must keep in mind that it is all permanent, leaving you with your ex’s name on your forearm for life. So always be sure to think before you ink. These days they have come out with ways to “fade” the tattoos but things will never be the same once you’ve been inked.

The Op-Ed

It is almost a year long since the 787billion was using in the economic system. Is there anything change? It was a most useful weapon in our people’s mind, but right now, it seems swam like a stone. The vice president said “The Federal government’s $787 billion program to reshape and stimulate the U.S economy is working better than expect”. Well, in my opinion, if the situation right now is better than their expectation, then maybe their expectation was set at a too low level at the beginning.
Do you know this word -- “To rob Peter to pay Paul”? That is what the thing happening right now. Why? Let’s say, first, the “big bill” digs a big hole of deficit. This is what the information from the web site “the deficit of the fiscal year 2009, which ended September 30, came in at a record $1.42 trillion, more than triple the record set just last year.” Oh, my god. All of us need to pay this in few years later in the form of high interest rate and taxes. Then the second thing is the taxes cutting. I knew that to those people who are the first time by house before this year, the government will give them the 8000dollars tax rebate. It sounds good. But I worried that this plan stimulates many people go to buy the house. In another words, the banks make a lot of loans that can help themselves to create the money. But I hope that they did not forget the poor people right now and this time crises happened just because too much loans were could not been paid. Well, hopping my worry is unnecessary. At last, one more thing I want to talk is for the unemployment rate. What the government said is “this stimulus plan would save or create 3.5 million jobs.” But the fact is the unemployment is 10.2% now. Those people who still have a job should feel so lucky they are. Do we doing something wrong in the stimulus plan? I am thinking that, in this plan, it saved or created the jobs by helping the companies but not the people. It cut the companies’ tax, gave them money to enlarge the job positions, but however, relies on the surface help is useless. We lost jobs because the demand of the market decreased but not the companies. The companies are only the thing that shows the relationship between the market and the workers. So, if we want to reduce the unemployment rate, we need to fix our market first. We need to recover our market, make it work normally then the demand would increase. In this way, the companies would really like to hire people because they need more workers but not just because the government gives them money to help them have enough ability to pay the workers’ salary.
After I made that much of comments on the stimulus plan, the plan has already been working for almost a year. What I can do is watching and praying.

America, land of the free? With all the talk of wanting to ban the use of tobacco, I have begun to wonder if our country still believes in the freedom of choice. Isn't it our choice on whether we want to use a product regardless of its health concerns? If people want to ban tobacco then why not ban other things like fast food in which is a leading contribitor to obesity in America. Obesity is fast growing epidemic in America casuing many health concerns and costing the government and tax payers millions every year in health costs. What about the other legal drug, alcohol? Alcohol is far worse then tobacco, not only is it also bad for your health and can lead to fatal diseases like liver disease and ulcers, but plays a bigger role on your brain as well. Most spousal and child abuse is tied to the use of alcohol. Many of the deaths on our road ways is contributed to people driving while intoxicated and that costs insurance companies and local and state police departments millions of dollars every year to either fix or try to discourage people from driving while under the influence. Is it fair that just because tobacco has major health concerns and is easy for underage kids to purchase, that it should be banned?
Allready we have had to deal with new laws, that restrict people from using tobacco products from certain areas, and make them go into a small room with little venitlation in order to have a smoke, which makes them breath even more toxic smoke into their lungs. The tax increase put on tobacco products this last April has also been unfair and un just. You neevr see the government put these kind of taxes on alcohol because they know alcohol is too important to our economy and buisnesses, like restuaraunts, bars, sports, and other events that distribute alcohol.
I feel that anti tobacco companies such as the truth and above the influence are good for our country to inform our youth about the risks of using tobacco, however I feel it is still up to the person on whether or not to use it. it is not up for our government to decide what is best for us, we are not dumb people, we understand it is not good for us, but either is many other things that americans do. I think we should let the tobacco company keep doing what it is doing and only focus more on educatining americans on the use of tobacco products and what it can do to you and others around you. Let the people who choose to use this product decide whether or not they want to use it.

Op Ed

By ANDREW POLLACK
Published: October 28, 2009
LOS ANGELES — In a tacit acknowledgment that the promise of human embryonic stem cells is still far in the future, California’s stem cell research program on Wednesday awarded grants intended to develop therapies using mainly other, less controversial cells.
The $230 million in grants awarded Wednesday to California universities and companies represent a big step toward moving stem cells from basic research toward application in treating diseases like cancer and AIDS. Grant recipients are supposed to have a therapy ready for initial human testing in four years.
But only 4 of the 14 projects involve embryonic stem cells. The others will use so-called adult stem cells or conventional drugs intended to kill cancer stem cells, which are thought to give rise to tumors.
The grants thus represent a departure from the program’s original mission. California voters approved the 10-year, $3 billion effort in 2004 largely to get around restrictions on embryonic stem cell research imposed by the administration of President George W. Bush.
Such research is ethically controversial because creation of embryonic stem cells involves the destruction of human embryos. This year, the Obama administration relaxed the previous administration’s restrictions.
Leaders of the California program say that what voters really care about are treatments for diseases, not what cell type is used. They say that from the outset the program was not restricted to the embryonic cells.
The commitment to voters was to “pursue the very best cell type for each disease,” said Robert N. Klein, the chairman of the California Institute for Regenerative Medicine, the agency that runs the program.
Still, the grant awards are likely to bolster one argument made by opponents of embryonic stem cell work: that such cells are not needed because treatments using adult cells are closer to fruition.
“This is the stuff that’s delivering for patients,” said David Prentice, senior fellow for life sciences at the Family Research Council, an organization opposed to abortion and embryonic stem cell research.
The California grants are “in a sense, not surprising,” Mr. Prentice said.
Embryonic stem cells can grow easily in culture and can turn into virtually any type of tissue in the body. The hope is that the cells might be turned into heart cells, brain cells or other types of cells to repair damaged and diseased organs.
But the embryonic stem cells themselves can grow into tumors in the body, so the cells have to be first turned into pure preparations of specific types of cells.
Adult stem cells can be obtained from the human body and turned into a more limited range of tissues. But adult stem cells have been the subject of research for a longer time and, in the form of bone marrow transplants, are already used to treat a variety of diseases.
One project financed Wednesday would involve retrieving cardiac stem cells from a patient’s heart. The cells would be multiplied in culture and then put back into the heart to try to repair damage from a heart attack.
Dr. Eduardo Marbán of Cedars-Sinai Medical Center, who will lead the project, said embryonic stem cells turn into immature heart cells that might not help an adult heart. “The last thing we want to do is grow rogue heart cells,” Dr. Marbán said.
Still, one project awarded financing would use embryonic stem cells to make insulin-producing islet cells that would be implanted in the body to treat Type 1 diabetes. The $20 million for the project went to Novocell, a San Diego biotechnology company, and the University of California, San Francisco.
Other projects involving embryonic stem cells are intended to treat stroke, Lou Gehrig’s disease and the eye disease called macular degeneration.
One project will use so-called induced pluripotent stem cells, which can be made from a patient’s own skin cells and have many of the properties of embryonic stem cells. Scientists at Stanford hope to harness those cells to treat a rare but debilitating skin disease called epidermolysis bullosa.
Two projects will essentially try to replicate the reported cure last year of a patient with AIDS. The patient, in Berlin, also had leukemia and got a bone marrow transplant to treat that disease. But the bone marrow donor had a genetic makeup making him naturally resistant to H.I.V.
For a given patient with AIDS it would be nearly impossible to find a donor that is both a good match and naturally resistant to H.I.V. infection. But the two research teams plan to take a patient’s blood-forming stem cells and inactivate a gene to make them resistant to H.I.V., then put them back in the body.
In addition to the $230 million being provided by California, the governments of Canada and Britain are together contributing $43 million because some of the research will be done in those countries.

they say i say...

In these chapters the author discusses how to format an argument paper. He starts out by stating that the introduction of "they say" is a good way to start your paper. By sharing journalists opinions, a brief anecdote, or facts found in a prestigious magazine you have somewhere to start your analysis and its a great way to give some background into your topic. Once you have entered into your topic you must them insert the "i say" which is exactly what you think on the subject. It could either be agreeing or disagreeing or it could be both but you must get it all out on the table before moving on to the support you need to back your ideas up.
When presenting where you stand on your subject you then have to find back up for what you are saying. You have to make it persuasive and accurate by still bringing in your ideas and thoughts.
So the "they say, i say" aspect of your argument paper is really just how you present it and where to put the information. In the anecdote at the beginning of the first chapter, the author discussed how the speaker she went to hear just discussed one side of the situation and it wasn't until questioning that the author finally understood the main point to the speech. So bringing that out within probably the second or third paragraph of your paper clarifys to the reader your main purpose of your paper.

I say

In my opinions, argument is kind of a way to lead somebody to learn and accept something new. Because of that when you argue with something, you need to show your evidences to support your claims no matter you agree with or disagree with. And, base on these evidences you posted, the audiences start to learn it and try to accept it. So, if they accepted your point, that means you success in your argument; if not, you may need to think more about your paper. In “They say, I say”, it also says that you need to give reasons why you disagree or not. In addition to that, in “They say, I say”, it point out that when we want to argue with something, we need to declare our position directly as well. But sometimes, most of us would like to say lots of evidences or examples or the summary of the quote then show out their position, and this is in order to want their paper looks more complex and reasonable or intelligence. I think that is right to say something then post out your point, but what is the “something” should be? In “They say, I say”, it gives us a very useful answer: a brief introduction or summary of what you are going to argue with. Because of that neither everybody read what you read nor experienced what you experienced. If you start your point directly, some of your audiences who did not read the target you are arguing would confuse what you are talking about and this would make your paper lack of subtraction. General speaking, this paper (“They say, I say”) gives us a very useful way to start our argument paper and make it stronger. And it not only tells us the methods but also gives us lots of examples. It is really good to us.

"They say"

Everyday we find ourselves arguing with someone about something, usually small and insignificant, but there are times when it is very important to you. Being able to back up your argument is very important to help you get your point across and make you sound educated in what your saying. This reading helps explain how effective it is to properly use what others have said on your same topic you are arguing, to support it. When someone else with an educated background on your topic, then you should use it, but use it effectively. Writing word for word what they say is that the correct way, instead summarize what they said to the key points that support your thesis.
Disagreeing and agreeing are ways to respond to what others have said. You cannot just say you agree with someone or disagree with them, you must give reasoning behind why you feel this way. When disagreeing with someone, you can use the "duh" approach. This is when somebody has stated something all ready that you find obvious and people should all ready know this. This can be a strong way in supporting your thesis against what other people have written that contradicts your argument. When agreeing with a comment, you should not just echo it again. Try using a personal experience to relate it to what your agreeing with or find something that it didn't not previously mention but goes with it so you are part of the conversation and not just repeating it.
This paper will help me with my argument paper by showing me not to just say i agree or disagree with a comment. I now understand you must find a way to put your own words into what they have previously said.

They Say, But I Say

Whenever we argue we want to prove the person we are arguing with wrong, right? We can't just start an argument and have nothing to oppose what the person we are arguing with is saying. This is the same when we write an argument paper. When we are writing our paper we have to remember that we are arguing with the opposing point of views of our subject. By introducing the opposing sides and showing our point of view shows the reader that we know what we are talking about and that even though they are several of sides to the argument they will know why we are taking the stance we are.
In this reading I find it interesting how it introduces the "they say" technique to help us as the writers introduce our perspective in our argument. When we let our reader know the different point of views they will be able to see why we agree or disagree with that. It also benefits us because we are filled with more curiosity and learn new things that we can present in our paper.
After all we need something or someone to argue with, or else our paper will be more of a plain and boring persuasive paper and although we want to persuade our audience we want to let them know why and what else is out there. We want them to see why they should agree with us and not leave them with doubts because that can lead them to turn against what we are trying to say. Of course we all have our own different opinions but it will be best if we can have our reader entertained through our paper so that by the end they can create their own opinions.
This reading is helpful to us because it shows us a good simple way to take a stand in our paper but also let the reader know of what else is out there. Not only do we get to let our reader know information about our subject but we as well will be able to learn more about it too. By the time we are done with out paper we will have enough information to support our paper.

Response to Politiccs and the English

Even though this paper was written in half century ago, when I read it, I still can felt that what Orwell said is still can be seen today. Since the language was created, it became the method to communicate and the tool to record the information. So, this requires both of the author and reader or speaker and listener can understand the meaning clearly. However, as the improving of the language, there is a bad habit growing too. Some people like to use some strange metaphors or some “too update” order to create what they say and write. It seems that only when everybody needs to ask them what they exactly want to say can mean they are so intelligence. At this point, the language’s function is disappeared. And Orwell just pointed out this bad phenomenon in his paper. In my opinion, we are writing is because we want to show to somebody what we thinking. If nobody can understand what you are talking about, then what anything else can your writing does? When we talk about politics, sometimes, we can see many political articles were written in their jargons. Of course, if these are for the scholars, that is no problem. But if you use these jargons in the news or newspaper or magazine, what would happen? I am sure nobody would buy it because not everyone is economist or politician. And usually, we are, the common people are the biggest part who very concern about the gas price and the interest for the households. So, the most intelligence way to write is not long limbs or the complicate words but the simple and easy writing. By the way, in the time that the information spreads in a high-speed, only the simple and clear language can adapt it. Or when you are still thinking what this word means, another word has already ran around the world.

politics and the english language by george orwell...

As i began reading this essay by George Orwell titled Politics and the English Language I started to see how much i use common phrases and metaphors, just as he was discussing, in papers or even everyday writing. Its so easy to turn to what sounds good than what the truth of your writing really is. He talks about making your writing interesting and still bringing the point through to the reader without changing words and meaning to sound scientific. The fact of the matter is that a lot of times we try to sound smart by using words we may not even know the meaning too. Which in turn makes us look very dumb.
Orwell then set up a few general rules to not use commonly worked phrases or metaphors especially when they don't fit with your writing. Secondly don't try to fluff up your paper when you find nothing to write about, such as using bigger words where a smaller word would fill it in just fine. And if the word is smaller and more accurate it should definitely be used over the vague larger word. Another idea he brings up is to use the active verbs over the passive meaning use "running" over needing to run. Once again this is another way for you to add more bulk to your paper but in the end you need to be precise and more accurate rather than vague and having a lot of big extravagant words to deal with.

Response to the Arguement.(Sorry guys, I am so late)

Be honest, I felt so sad when I saw the “20 pages”. How much time do I need to finish it? I don’t know. And addition to this, this paper’s title seems not very interesting. Then, I started to read it under the very unwilling feeling. However, when I finished the first two pages, I found it is a really funny paper. Then after I finished the reading the paper, I find out there are many places very interesting and thoughtful to me.
The first place is the “cultures of harmony”. It was come from Tannan’s word. It describes the cultures such as Japan and China, view open conflict and disagreement as a threat to the group. Maybe because I am a Chinese, I always very sense about the things that relates to Chinese unconsciously. I thought the “cultures of harmony” really matches the Chinese culture. In the Chinese culture, polite and good manner are very important. We were taught “with good attitude to talk to the other” or “when you want to point out somebody’s mistake, do not too directly or you will hurt them” all the time. I always believe that. But I also think that a good argument needs a very direct opening actually. Because we need to persuade the people and the direct and strong opening can always help us to reach the success.
Another interesting place to me is the section about the “two sides of an argument”. I like this sentence “Instead of two sides to every issue, might there be thirteen”. It just let me know everything is variable. Just like a plate, it maybe not in a circle shape. But it doesn’t mean it must be square. It can be a triangle or in a fish shape or any other shape. And came back to the argument, when we have a claim, we need to clear what side we are going to argue and how to support our argument. It requires us to think the sides of this claim carefully because the relationships between these sides are not only opposite. It can be support each other or support the same thing and so on. So, when we meet these things in the argument, we need to find a perfect way to support our own claim.
Then, how to find the perfect way is another place that I found interesting in this paper. That is to get the information from your audiences. The author called it “op-ed”. Because from your peers’ feedback, you can know what do they care most. In addition to this, from their questions you can know in what place you need to put more evidences to strong your comments. All of these can improve your paper. There are many other places can give us idea and knowledge to write a good paper such as how to begin with a hypothesis, how to move your reader, how to avoid some fallacies and so on. General speaking, this paper is very helpful to a argument writer especially to those fresh writer.

"Politics and the English Language"

We have all been a victim of how at times the English language can cause confusion. This happens whether someone is speaking and/or even writing. Most people switch their words around to make themselves sound more intellectual and even to sound smart. What people don't realize is that by doing this it only confuses the reader or the audience on what they are trying to say. For example, when I read my psychology textbook it is hard to comprehend the material because of all the complicated terms the content has but when my teacher lectures it I seem to understand better.

This happens all the time, the writer gets carried away with what the audience is going to think that they try and perfection their writing. It is important to stay away from doing that and to remember that the audience includes a lot of people and sometimes believe it or not general and simple words have a better impact on the writer.

Orwell does a great job in explaining why we should be careful with our writing. Myself, personally has tried to reword what I was trying to say thinking that it will make a better paper but I realize that I was wrong. If I can barely understand what I am trying to say then how do I expect my readers to understand. It is impossible because the material is coming from me and all they can do is assume which at times can give them a different perspective than mine. We are writing to persuade not to confuse, so stating our main points and clarifying them by providing information is what we should worry about instead of using metaphors or big words to sound smarter.

Just like all the short readings we have read as a class this one as well is helpful for when we write any paper (not just our argument paper). It serves as a reminder on what we want to have in our paper. I got to remind myself to be able to clarify my writing so my reader can understand where I am coming from. Unlike the politicians who try to persuade us to vote for them by using big words to confuse us, I must allow my reader to understand what stance I am taking.

Argument Reading Response...

While reading Bruce Ballenger's excerpt from The Creative Writer he shares what is an argument, how to present one, and how to make people interested. He begins by talking about the differences in Op-Ed writing and persuasive writing in general. Persuasive writing tends to be more formal while letter's to the editor tend to be much more catchy and appealing to read.
An argument essay first starts with a topic that may be controversial but definitely has two sides of the subject to discuss. It could be something political, environmental, or just something public that annoys you. It gives you a good chance to share your views with whomever reads the paper and also get responce on what others think of the issue. By bringing up the topic you could even make changes towards an even better world.
He goes on to say that when you present your argument be sure to not attack the opposition but introduce other views showing your openness to the subject. You don't have to necessarily agree with the opposite side of your topic but you have to at least accept it.
You must also share some facts to back up your ideas. Even if you feel very strongly about a subject you can't expect people to agree or believe you until you back yourself up.

"Writing an Argument" reading response.

In the essay "Writing an Argument," Bruce Ballinger gives detail on how to effectively write a convincing and educated argument paper. He explains that just because you have strong information on your subject and give tons of facts and opinions in your paper, that the reader will understand or be persuaded by it. He also lays the main problems that many draft argument papers may have, such as your thesis stated clearly, sufficient evidence, considered counterarguments, and so forth.
Everyone argues everyday about something or other, and usually its something small and unimportant. When you argue with someone about something you find important to you, you will sound more educated and may be able to change the other person's mind, if you know what you are talking about and understand what their arugment is. all to often though, we go into an argument hot headed and not having a good clear understanding of what your arguing about. This makes your argument unefective and unorganized.
With what Bruce Ballinger as shown in this reading, I feel I now have more of an understanding of what exactly an argument essay consists of. That I can have all the information in the world on my topic but if I do not use it correctly and am able to relate it properly to my thesis statement that my reader will be lost in facts and information and not what I am trying to say. Also that you can never have enough information, and even after you write you draft, go back to the library and search for more information that you may be able to use. Using false anaolgies, begging the question, and appealing to popularity among other logical fallicies are common problems writers face in writing their paper. Now that i know what these are and how I can avoid them, I will hopefully be able to make my paper more logical and easier for the reader to understand and believe. This reading has shown me many ways to correct and revise my drafts in the future for this paper, I feel I will now have a stronger understanding about what this paper should entail and how to back up your thesis properly.

Argument Paper Reading Response!!!!

When I think about arguing with someone or against something I think of me usually gettting into a dispute where I state my point and walk off angry.That usually doesn't get me anywhere and doesn't solve what I was arguing about. A lot of people like me, tend to do that and in the end it's like there was no point in arguing. Arguing is always misinterpreted by people, but Bruce Ballenger does a great job in explaining what is a good way to argue and how can your argument be effective. He describes many different ways of approaching an argument and taking it further than what we already know to have better knowledge of our subject.
Anyone is capable of creating an argument by stating their opinion and providing information of why they are right. We all have heard how they are two sides to a story but in reality they are more. An argument is more complex than that and throughout our research we will find out why this is true. As we research our topic we will see all different sides to it and have more questions to answer that will only give us more knowledge.
By acknowledging the opposing sides, we are become familiar with the the pros and cons about our topic. Writing about something we are interested is good, but Ballenger says that people who have preexisting beliefs are usually close minded to other perspectives. An argument is not about being right but it is more about stating why you think you are right and having your research and not your prior knowledge as your evidence.
This reading gives me a better understanding on how to write my argument paper. By researching the subject as whole and not only your point of view really gives you a better idea on the subject. It makes it easier to comprehend the issue overall. Not only do we learn what we already know but yet we learn things that perhaps we never thought about. I am glad that now I know that when writing my argument paper I shouldn't only state my side but yet be a critical thinker and be open minded to the other sides. This will either reassure me on what I already know or possibly even change my opinion. Overall it will be great to learn more on this topic of mine.

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